The Alarm Clock.

by Jessica   Jan 19, 2008


This was a poem I had to write for english class, and it had specific guidelines so it's not my usual style. But I'd still like to see what you think. :]

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Slipping silently into the sea of her dreams,
shaking in fear as nightmares engulf her.
Tingles speed up her spine, her fear
possesses, stresses, messes with her mind.
Suddenly stops,
as if her terror had been timed,
the timer had finally gone off.

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  • 16 years ago

    by BlueEyedMystery

    Wow, amazing poem. I absolutely loved the alliteration. You should have gotten above an A+ haha. Seriously though this was a beautifully written poem. You have a lot of talent!

    -Tingles speed up her spine, her fear
    possesses, stresses, messes with her mind.-
    ^^As said above this is also my favorite line. :]]

    Keep writing!
    Cayce

  • 16 years ago

    by Rob Matt

    Its very cute. I enjoy the aliteration in the 1st & 3rd lines. The structure is lovely, and you did it very well since it isnt your style. Its good if it WAS your style. Its good in general.

  • 16 years ago

    by NyellMoonlight

    I like this a lot. It is intense and truly greatly written. You created powerful atmosphere within every line. The portrayed emotions are overwhelming. You managed to say so much within such short piece and that is truly impressing.
    Favorite lines:

    -Tingles speed up her spine, her fear
    possesses, stresses, messes with her mind.-
    ^^
    Very effective and somehow haunting...

    Greatly done!
    5/5 from me

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