Comments : Angel, why not me?

  • 16 years ago

    by The Queen

    Silly Angel, you can't fly with just one wing,
    I see you lying on a bed of broken dreams
    I can't help but ask- Can you love one such as I?
    With your consent I'll give you strength and help you fly.

    ^^ Nice flow of words and nice intro as well...Lyin in a bed of broken dreams, is such a beautiful yet sad thoughts you have painted there..

    My sweet Angel, I will love you in disguise,
    For all I am is friendship- and the cost my heart's demise.
    If I leave you here and let you fade away.
    Would I be free, or have a debt I can't repay?

    ^^Very well written indeed..I love reading these kind of poems with punctuations and no ryhmes at all..For all I am is friendship- and the cost my heart's demise...The meaning is so deep but only broken hearted ones can relate...

    Angel, why ever did you love him so?
    Answer this and maybe I can let you go..
    My heart is screaming let you fall,
    But if I lose you as a friend- then I have truly lost it all.

    ^^Askin a question added effect on this stanza...Filled wit sad emotions straight from your heart..This piece really touched my heart..Excellent Job..

    PS.. i dunno who voted down your poem but i think this particular piece is stunningly done..Anyways, take it from me, you did this fabulously..

  • 16 years ago

    by Amir Riveroll

    I like ur poem... sounds sweet