-Her gaze could light a fire,
Though rain falls from the sky,
Mesmerizing from first glance,
Such comfort as you die.-
^This was a nice start, first line didn't catch my attention too much but in the second and third line you started to build a truly interesting and intense rhythm but somehow (this is just my opinion) fourth line totally threw me off. It doesn't feet with the rest of that stanza.

I think that this poem would be even much better without rhymes cause your rhyming seems forced and it ruined the flow for me but I don't want to offend you, I actually and honestly enjoyed in this poem.
You have good choice of words and you mixed vivid imagery with excellently expressed emotions and I truly like that.