In Love With A Memory

Very good. being in love with just a memory is one of the hardest loves there is.
keep up the work
take care
5/5

This was a satisfactory piece. Although you were trying to present a very distressed emotion, I didn't feel as though you'd written the piece with the appropriate poetic techniques to show that. In some aspects, the flow was not consistent and it did show a lack of control over the words. I am not deeming this poem terrible, although it isn't the best one I’ve read so far.

Sometimes it isn't necessary to apply literal terms to a poem for the reader to understand the point you're making. When you write a poem and want a certain line to stand out - try writing it in the simplest form. That is the true way it tends to stand out.

Take this line for instance: "But it's not real love." For me, the 'it's' and 'not real' didn't work very well. It seemed like you wanted to force in the words (I am not saying that was your intention, it's just how the sentence reads off to me).

And to refrain from being so literal and exact in describing, just simply say:
"But this is not 'love'"...

Do you see the difference? I am not telling you to change the line, for if you feel your approach is more appropriate - then so be it. I am merely offering a suggestion! :)

Wow that was amazing. i really felt the expressions well 5/5 !props!

Awe, that was so sad, I loved it.