Aww i know what you mean with the whole dad thing. 5/5 !props!

The poem started off well, although you seemed lose track of the flow as you happened to extend the length of your lines. You present emotion in the typical "you and me" style poem structure - which is fine; but you must try and ensure that you don't disturb the rhythm, which eventually taints the reading quality of the poem.

Also, I think you should re-read some of the sentences; you've made minor errors with the choice of words.

Other than that, a well written piece. Good stuff. :)

Very sad.
"Now they doesn't mean a thing."
should be
"Now that doesn't mean a thing."

I dont really care of the love of my parents havent seen my dad in six years mom well i dont care, nice poem though i enjoyed how it slowly unraveled 4/5 plz do my latest two