Thank You

by Abu3li   Jan 20, 2008


Thank you so much for the trust
Accusing me of what I'm not

Is that what friendship stands for
Stabbing your friend more an' more

It's as if I'm living a nightmare
Dying 'n' you are looking with no care

How could you say or think of these words
And cuttin' my heart with all these swords

Hugging me to stop me from breathing air
And telling me that you truly for me care

Thank you again and again and again
Thank you, for adding a wound to my pain

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  • 16 years ago

    by Rin

    Aren't friends just the best!?

    Once again - I can relate so the poem was by all means worth the time...

  • 16 years ago

    by Shinobi

    This poem is another piece that many can relate to. We come across many fake "friends" who make us believe that they care. The flow here was a bit rocky because of all the slang you used. I think that if you wrote it in a high level language it would sound better. Nice work 4/5

  • 16 years ago

    by N J Thornton

    I get an overwhelming sense of sarcasm with this poem, which makes me want to laugh. I know it's a serious subject but it's funny.
    In terms of poetic originality there's not much of it here. In terms of poetic device, it hasn't any of that either. It's a pretty average poem overall. What I did like though, apart from the sarcasm was the genuine emotion. That's something that even I can't deny.
    Oh and I commented on your most recent poem because you didn't state which one you wanted me to comment on.
    Keep writing.

  • 16 years ago

    by waiting 4 some1

    Splendid poem, very touching, very beautiful, you don't have many poems here but all of them are very unique and suits my type

    keep writting and i hope everything is ok with you

    may Allah bless you

  • 16 years ago

    by Alexander

    The use of words could be slightly better. Don't get me wrong it is a good poem and has very good potention, but i think with just a little more time and tweaking it could be much better. You have good potentional. 4/5

    Signed,
    Alexander

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