This is a magnificent piece of work. There is a message hidden in it that is amazing. The only thing that i see that may be wrong with is is the punctuation. I mean the flow is great but the commas make you pause in some places that you shouldn't. All together though it is wonderful. 5/5

Signed,
Alexander

Good flow,very unique,awsum

Hay, I loved this poem,
your message was so clear
and so very true!!
It was beautifully written
and really had a lot of honest meaning,
good job,
keep up the good work,
***Take care***