Tread Lightly In The Water, Darling.

Tread lightly in the water darling if I had the chance I'd help you drown,
`Easily the best line in this piece -- and the most sarcastically wicked thing I've EVER heard. I just adore it.

You've become such a nonsense to me spluttering your tear-less lies.
`"Such a nonsense to me" sounds odd. My brain keeps replacing it with nuisance instead of seeing "nonsense."

A splash of sea salt to those pupils would teach you how to whimper,
But oh no that would be too much for you, To weep just once for me.
`Two lines that say so much. I love the choice of words. The first line is just BRiLLiANT. "Teach you how to whimper." It's so compelling. The mockery of these words are just a real smile-cracker.

Like sand to a salty crotch you've become such a fine neurotic itch,
Though sweetie if you add a B you'll surely realize what you truly are.
`HAHAHAHA ! i LOVE iT. This is by the far my most FAVOURiTE poem that I've EVER read in my LiFE. "If you add a B" -- very clever, I must say. And the way you end it is just...man, your work literally leaves me speechless -.-''

This whole piece is just -shivers. It gave me goosebumps, laughs, and it was such a compelling piece. Ahh! Your words are a beautifully captivating world to get lost in.

--..MiNDYY

This poem has that same feel of the guy who is fed up with all the crap his ditsy little girlfriend puts him through. Of course thats what it is but it seems so much different than what you would hear most people say doesn't it? You convey the real feelings most guys have toward their girlfriends! Good job.

Wow this poem is amazing and very very nicely written.. it kept me interested the entire time.. it just pulled me in ... it is a very powerful poem.. i cant really describe the way it made me feel.. i loved it.. great write! nice job =)

Oh I just loved this! The hidden humor behind this was just wonderful and you just wrote everything with such ease and beautiful. You truly have a way with words and creating flawless imagery. I always find myself lost in the scenes you create with your words .. so captivating. Well done *5/5*

Well, this is truly interesting it kept my attention and I am quite impressed.
Ending left me literally speechless, you always have a fantastic way to end a masterpiece like this one, ending line is so effective and the fact that you ended a poem with a opening line fascinates me cause it is truly powerful and I felt like the whole piece goes in circles, I don't now how to explain that.
This is really different from your usual work but I still admire your writing, this piece posses a overwhelming inner sarcasm. All in all beautifully done.