Wow this is really really really good. i like it good job.

Hi

It's a nice poem to be read. It's way of moving from one idea to another is good.

Keep it up
HerGuardian

This poem is really good, I liked he structure you used - I think it helped the flow run more smoothly. Your rhyming was also very good and the emotion you used was clear all the way through very nice job =]

This is intresting. It's not cliche at all and it gave a different spin in which I had originally thought it to be. My only suggestion which isn't even a suggestion is maybe use some capital letters just a thing of mine. Nice job
5/5

I added this to my favorites. i really enjoyed reading this and i can relate. thank you for sharing
~Ben