The Note! <3

by Christina   Jan 22, 2008


In a room all alone
I feel the cold inside of me
and it wont go away
all alone I shall be

I take the razor blade
and press hard into my soft skin
oh how it feels so good, but
all alone I shall be

the blood dripping down my arm
I cry for him
the only one that I love,
but he can't hear me

a tear begins to fall down my face
all I want is him
and thats all I need before I pass
I try to get up

I finally get up
and grab a little piece of paper
I grab a pen
all of a sudden I fall to the ground

I wake up in the hospital
my dad standing next to me
a tear rolling down his face
I had never seen him cry before

and in his hands his a little piece of paper
he reads it to me
"Matt you're the only one I love"
is what it says

he throws it at me and says
"you die for him, but not your family"
I start to cry
"I'm so sorry"

he turns his back
and thats when I said
"thats why, you always turn your back on me,
but he doesn't"

my dad walks out of the room
tears are streaming from my eyes
I fall asleep
to never awake again

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  • 16 years ago

    by Sora

    Wowww. this was a great piece. i loved every single word. im like totally speechless. wow it was beauitful yet sad. and you can really make your words come to life, i could almost picture it all in my head. fantastic! i loved this piece. job well done. 5/5.

    -Ashlei.

  • 16 years ago

    by BeautifulxMess

    Well, for starters, the poem was
    kind of a mess. Parts rhymed and
    others didn't. Now, I'm not a fan of
    free verse but to make the free verse
    more readable you could have made
    each line about the same sylables, that
    makes it more easier to read. You didn't
    really use your imagination with this,
    kinda of a cliche poem. YOu have a lot
    a grammar problems in here which
    didn't help either. Just keep trying you're
    only begining. I am just helping out.
    I perfer not to vote becuase I don't want to
    break you're 5.0 streak and I don't think this poem is 5.0.
    <3Tay
    Keep trying.

  • 16 years ago

    by jane

    Wow so emotional and sad but written well very good

  • 16 years ago

    by DeViN sCoTt

    Dang that was AMAZING:)!!!!! I abselutly loved it!
    keep it up :)

    nanaz!

  • 16 years ago

    by Brittany

    Wow.
    You are an amazing writer.
    This made me tear up.
    I'm glad my dad isnt like that
    But i wish yours wasnt like that either.
    I hope your relationship with him becomes better.
    Much love
    Brittany

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