I thought overall it was pretty decent, it had amazing flow throughout. I thought some of your rhymes were forced and the face you used tight and then tighter two lines in a row.

"Our war is not a matter of oil or machines
The war is a religion; the latest social scene"

THose were the best two lines by far
a well deserved 5/5

I really liked the personality and voice in this piece, the flow was also done pretty well. As much as I liked this piece though, I feel like something is missing; I just dont know what it is. could be a personal side note but thought I'd throw it out there.

Nice write.