I am very confused as to why you don't have more comments on your poems. They're so much more fresh and original than most of the stuff on this site. As an example of that... you use the word "peculiar." It's a somewhat quaint and outdated word that could easily be replaced with something more blunt, like "crazy," "weird," etc. But I like "peculiar" much more. It has a sense of the exotic - like something collected and inspected but never quite understood.

The whole course of this poem was interesting to me. I liked that you were "so near" to opening your eyes that you could see him - that was a nice, strange touch. One question: did you mean to say "I'd been (so) amazed by...?" Seems like you'd need a "so," so that you can have a "that."

Well, that was an awkward sentence. Anyway, I quite liked this. Off to read some more!

Sibyllene said exactly my thoughts in that first paragraph. Your work is so unique and refreshing. And the word "peculiar" is so enticing as compared to the now somewhat watered down vocabulary people have. Anyhow. I really enjoyed the story depicted in this piece -- such a unique point of view. A wonderful write in my opinion!