Hey darl a very touching piece. very well written lot of emotion coming through. 5/5 xx

My only thought is for this line
"You used to wipe away each tear now, you cause them"
the pause should be after "tear"
so it would be
"You used to wipe away each tear, now you cause them"
or you could add a hyphen
You used to wipe away each tear-now you cause them"

this is contest worthy!
5/5

Wow! Your poemsarent long at all ^^ I normally like poems which rhyme but yours some how..I'm not sure I just had to read onward =S Maybe it's because I'm not exactly in the same "situation" but I can realate to the poem in some ways ^^ great write!! mwah xxx

First off ... loved the title. Your titles always seem to reel me in. Beautifully done.

The last two lines of your first stanza was just amazing. I could picture everything just flawlessly. That stanza just hooked me in and I was eager to read more.

On to the whole poem ... flawless. Your writing style is enjoyable unique and fun to read. This poem had me captivated and I was in trance while reading ... no joke.

The emotions were so real and ones I could easily relate with. Amazing.

Rewind to four months ago when all I did was smile,
Watching as each scene plays in front of my tired eyes;
I remember every memory like it was just yesterday...
There goes that stupid ring tone of yours playing again;

^the imagery here was just flawlessly effective. Beautifully done.

I know you will do great in contest .. overall a joy to read.

*5/5*

I can really relate to this poem! ((did you win btw?)) I thought it was so good, not like most with the cliche rhyming..i really enjoyed reading it. Made me a little sad, but was super good! :)

Keep it up! -n- take care!

"January has become my month of tears [I hate crying]
You used to wipe away each tear now, you cause them,
Pencil in my hand but my thoughts just won't connect;
Oh how I wish I could cut and paste our memories-"

^I think those lines are perfect, just perfect. And amazing. This whole poem is just so well writen. You display your emotion in such a beautiful way. It makes me feel it from first word to last. I don't know what to say anymore...I just LOVE it. I do hope things get better though..I hope you don't hurt forever. If only love was easy..
Great work! =]
--Viola