I can see where you were trying to go with this piece, i just think you might have tried a little to hard. Some of the lines seemed a bit forced. The twist in the middle was a shock and it keep me reading tell the end to see what happened. The imagery in it is also very breath-taking. All together i must say it is a very heart-stopping piece. 4/5

Signed,
Alexander

Again, a very beautiful love poem.
"I can look into your eyes,
and not see the anger, or the hate.
You look at me with those eyes,
and I fall in love all over again."

All love should be like this.
5/5