"A place where sin does not exsist.
But lately I'm afraid I won't be spared."

I really like that fraise. The fourth paragraph is soooo strong when at the end you write please... that's really good bringing it back down from forte to soft and a question, i like it, affective..

Yeah good last line and all.... it's really affective.....this poem/lyrics are very good and would makea good song....