Comments : Falling Out of Love

  • 16 years ago

    by MyEscape

    Oh yes, falling out is so much harder than falling in. I liked the concept for this piece and your idea about saying the dictionary was wrong. The only suggestion I have is to give it more structure. Some parts rhyme, some don't. Some lines are really long, and some are really short, so I would just fix it up a bit. Other than that, good job!
    *ME*

  • 16 years ago

    by chloe

    Wow...thanks for the info, im new at this so yea :D

  • 16 years ago

    by Katherine

    I have to say that you are completely correct. The wrost thing is trying to fall out of being in love with someone. Great writing 5/5.

  • 16 years ago

    by pookiengurgi

    Wow that was really good...I especially love the way you pulled it all together so fluently at the end