Real

Firstly, the third line in stanzas one and three are far too short and ruin the flow of the piece, but apart from that, I liked it. It was a simple piece, done in a way that's been done many a time, but it was nice. I liked your rhymes, but simple rhymes won't always work.

Brad

P.S. Thanks for your comment onmy poem 'When', I'm glad you liked it.

P.P.S. When you comment on people's poems don't say 'check mine out' or anything like that, because it actually puts people off from reading it, not me, but some people.

I like the imagery to this. it seems so simple but the feeling seems so....real. you did a good job on this :) keep up the good work and hope to get more comments from you soon, thanks for the comment on mine :)
thanks
~*~Amber~*~

This piece was nice. I usually rather dislike to read love poems because everyone tries, but not everyone can write them. They're actually the hardest types of poems to write really well, and yet everyone thinks they can do it. Anyway, your I felt had something a little different, but I'm not sure what it was. Maybe it was just that it wasn't as over the top, lovey dovey as most love poems are on this site. Anyway, good job love

Brad

P.S. Thanks for commenting on 'When', it's my favorite.

Thats a really good poem. made it seem real. good job. keep writing, comment on my newest poem please

Very very good job! I know just how it feels to wake up from dreams like this