This is so good!!

The way i have read this pm to m its oud yk he is huting you badly can i just say that i grew up around my farther hiting my mother al my life and trust e the best way to hep someone like tat is to leave them love this poem

Very good i loveit keep up the good work

This is really good.

Amazing !!

I love this one. Has a great flow to it. Thanks so much for the comment. =]

Excellent write....terrible that in it the male resorts to violence.but I loved it:)

I liked the narrative in this piece. It was very good, and very real, with certain things like
‘You block out what I'm saying,
For you've heard these cries before
The price, you keep on paying,
For you could not love me more’
and
‘You send my body sailing,
As you smash me to the ground
You're deafened by my wailing,
Then left begging for a sound’
The first of these two stanzas (stanza two in your piece) is my favourite of all. Not only is it so real, but I particularly like the last two lines of it ‘The price, you keep on paying’ because I just like what you’ve done, and I find it clever, and ‘For you could not love me more’ for its tone, and delivery.

Brad

P.S. Thanks for your comments on my poem ‘These Stars Are Our Stars’. I do usually try to make my rhymes as clever and unexpected as possible.