It's very well written for a poem which took so long to be created. The only opportunity for improvement comes with the immature words "mad" and "sad". There are better words that can be here. When I was in 8th grade learning poetry (back in the day) we were taught not to use adjectives with less than 4 letters. I dunno how you will take this. I just mean to help. =DD

Wow, this is so moving and forceful, outstanding poem, love the middle beginning and ending, two thumbs up!!!