by HOLLYWOODxBANGBANG Jan 29, 2008
category :
Friendship, family /
broken friendship
At the count of three we`ll hold our breath, fight this down to the death; |
by Teria
I'll start with the bad. The ending [last line mostly] was a bit off, with the whole flow thing. Actually, as I look back it's only the last line. It fits in perfectly, but it just doesn't flow, maybe a few extra syllables. . .somehow? |