Drink The Night Away

by Jenni Marie   Jan 29, 2008


Tick Tock...
Time is going by so slow...

Reach for the bottle, pour another glass
Reminisce about happier memories past
raise the glass to poisoned ruby red lips
Contemplate when your world began to slip

Tick Tock...
How can time pass slowly when life rushes by so fast?

Another night, strong whiskey dulling the pain
Voices in your head, when did you become insane?
Oops, almost out of whiskey, time to find the gin
How did you ever let this vicious cycle begin?

Tick Tock...
Everything's monotonous, life now in repeat mode.

And as the cool alcohol slips down your throat
Aware you're emotionally starting to choke
No more hangover's, you're used to it now
Want to make a change, but not sure how

Tick Tock...
Running out of time, your insides are suffocating.

Constantly slumped in that damn old chair
Questioning when your life became so unfair
Night's all the same, you're drinking them away
Just another statistic...how pathetically cliche

Tick Tock...
Oops, you drank yourself to death.

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  • 16 years ago

    by meghan

    That is an excellent poem!! I love it. You have great vocabulary.

  • 16 years ago

    by munkee04

    So did you win the contest??? Well if you did, great job, cause its a great poem, and if you didnt, well, its still a great poem. I loved everthing you wrote, it just seemed so real. Just thinking of all the people who are actually like that...Great poem, loved it!!!

  • 16 years ago

    by Stephanie

    First off, I really love the repetition of "Tick, tock", for some reason it added a certain special quality to the poem that I just adore.

    "Reminisce about happier memories past
    raise the glass to poisoned ruby red lips"
    -- These two lines were simply beautiful. They were so simply stated but when I read them they just struck me hard. Amazing. And I love the imagery in "poisoned ruby red lips" -- truly beautiful.

    "Oops, almost out of whiskey, time to find the gin"
    -- An amazing line with a touch of sarcasm, I love it. :]

    "Night's all the same, you're drinking them away
    Just another statistic...how pathetically cliche"
    -- I don't know why but these lines stuck out to me. So sad, yet when I read them I found a hint of sarcasm. Nicely done.

    "Tick Tock...
    Oops, you drank yourself to death."
    -- In my opinion: the perfect ending. That's all I'm gonna say.

    The flow was smooth, the emotions were intense, and your vocabulary was wisely chosen.

    Spectacular job, m'dear. Overall: 5.5
    -- Steph <3

  • 16 years ago

    by robin milford

    I enjoyed this the ending is a bit blatant

  • 16 years ago

    by You Kill Me

    You are really good.
    I am new and I feel stupid asking this but how do we enter contests....But once again you are really REALLY Good

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