Trapped

by SH3S fiNAllY H3R3 l0V3 U N3NA   Jan 29, 2008


It is said that love can set one free,
But I guess that it forgot about me.
For trapped within the darkness I am,
Always feeling a stream of tears from my eyes.

For within the time I've felt this pain,
All I've done is be driven insane.
By the thought of knowing you're not mine,
That never again shall the sun shine.

For here in the darkness I am alone,
And this is where I am always prone.
To think only of you,
And of the day that my heart's desires may come true.

That you will be with me,
So da darknes will finaly see,
That love is greater than any fear,
And that it no longer has a place here.

But then I open my tear filled eyes,
And see that which is my hearts demise.
To see that you are not here and that I am all alone,
Here in da darknes where no light is shown.

So for this I'm trapped forever,
Within my hearts pain.
Until the day this darkness's rule,
Is finally slain.

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  • 16 years ago

    by RobinAnn13

    This one is definately going on my faves list. I was wondering if you used da instead of the on purpose? Just curious. the theme of the poem is one I really like. The emotion is really good too. I did want to tell you that the first stanza, last two lines don't rhyme. I don't know if that was on purpose or not but the rest of the stanzas rhyme so I wanted to point it out just in case. <3<3 5/5

  • 16 years ago

    by Lecrissa

    Ok first off verse one last line flip it around 'the tears stream from my eyes' that should fix the flow problem that through off the verse. Next its great. But if your still stuck on this guy you need to get out and meet some new people. Thats how you grow and expan your writing.

  • 16 years ago

    by Torey Hafford

    Aye dizz is rlly good keep up da work ma goof writez