by A Phoenyx in Flight Jan 29, 2008
category :
Sadness, depression /
about depression
Separated from the rest. |
This poem had pretty good structure. There were a few things like "noise" where I think you meant to put "nose" and the new line just for the words "she fears" that made the fow not quite as smooth as it could of been, but you did a good job of describing things again. 4/5 |