Dying

by Abu3li   Jan 30, 2008


Dying

The pain you put me through is unbearable
It torments every tiny part of me
I feel immobilized, I feel incapable
The pain imprisoned me when I felt free

I'm walking through those defaced people
To the void, tormenting deadly life
For the first time I feel unable
To go on, unable to strive

The profound ugliness of my future
That if I really had one
Is full of pain, misery and torture
Agonizing darkness, no place for the sun

You stabbed me, left me in the cold
Wishing for the uncoming death
Life is undesirable and bold
When happiness became just a myth

I'm bleeding, waiting for my time
Shaking, aching, my feelings are numb
Come and finish me, it ain't a crime
I need your merciful death, please come!!

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  • 16 years ago

    by Lu

    Pain drizzles through your lines like tears and makes their way into the reader's heart.
    So much emotion set forth in this piece and loss of all hope so very evident in your ending ....

    The profound ugliness of my future
    That if I really had one
    Is full of pain, misery and torture
    Agonizing darkness, no place for the sun
    ^^^
    I can feel the heartache in these lines.

    Sad, touching piece you've penned!
    Luanne

  • 16 years ago

    by Prasad Baadkar

    Painful... Give a damn to pain cuz life has so much of love & once one understands it than who would wanna die... who would wanna cry in loneliness... Greaaaattttt poem... 007

  • 16 years ago

    by Jenn

    It's evident in this poem that you are great with rhyming. It doesn't sound forced at all. I like this a lot 5/5

  • 16 years ago

    by Meme

    OMG!!!
    this is so painful and amazing 5/5

  • 16 years ago

    by Shinobi

    This poem is really sad. You show here how much you suffer. This is a poem many can relate to. Also, you used the words torment/torture lots of times which emphesizes your pain. The flow and choosing of words were great 5/5

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