Please Come Back

by SH3S fiNAllY H3R3 l0V3 U N3NA   Jan 30, 2008


Tell me how the sun could shine,
If you're someone else's, and not mine?
How can life still be sweet,
If your not here to make my heart beat.

This sorrow that now consumes me,
For destiny has it,
That there shall not be a you and me.

Days have gone by that I've sat here,
Wondering if I should sercome to this fear,
That I'll be alone,
Until the day I die that I die,
And always know why.

For I let you go that one dreadful day,
Where as to now I wish you'd stay.
I wish I could turn back time,
To the day before I started this rhyme.

For I had found an angel such as you,
I didn't know if what I felt was true.
But it's to late for me to say,
That I've loved you since the very first day.

But I shall wait until the time,
To when I may finally end this rhyme,
And ask you the question my heart did lack,
If you love me one day, will you please come back.

Collab with JoSe LoPeZ
http://www.poems-and-quotes.com/author.html?id=339870

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  • 16 years ago

    by Angel

    Amazing

  • 16 years ago

    by RobinAnn13

    I like the general message and the feeling to the poem but there are two things I would like to point out.
    1] the rhyme scheme is off, it might be better if the scheme was the same throughout the poem. Not every stanza has to rhyme the same but the poem sounds better in general if there is some sort of recognizable pattern to it.
    2] there are some grammar mistakes that a proof reader could point out to you. I won't point every single one out unless you'd like me to.
    I give this poem a 4/5 though. It's still definately worth reading. ^.^

  • 16 years ago

    by Lecrissa

    I like, I like. It flows has a griping emotion, and most of all brings back memeries of a lost love. Sociopathiclips is right it should be a song..... need to fix verse 5 2nd line what has 2 t's

    I enjoyed 5/5

  • 16 years ago

    by Hawaiizang3l

    Wow, nice collaboration. was a little bumpy the second & 3rd stanzas. but overall i did enjoy reading it cuz i feel simliar. I love reading poems i can relate to you. :)

    Take care -n- Keep it up!

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