I really liked this a lot! I can totally imagine it as a song, I sort of sung it in my head in a chill but sort of up-tempo beat and I don't know if that's how you wanted it, but I loved it.

Your incorporation of honest lyrics plus the imagery of lightening worked really well. I felt like there could have been a little more in this piece, however, it still struck all the right chords. Well done!

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I really liked this! It should flowed so fluidly. I could tell you wrote it with the intent of it being a song and I think it was effective. The repitition really got your message across and overall it was a joy to read. Well done *5/5*