Wow this was good

Wow.
I really liked this poem.

This was my favorite part "i finally see a path in this dark maze that bleeds
a path that does not scream
a path where the maze doesn't bleed
i go closer to it but the light just begins to flee
i try to follow it but its still kinda hard to see
all of a sudden I'm sweep away in a sea
i began to panic grasping to breathe
i can feel my life being pulled away from me
my spirit is flushed with anguish beyond belief
and then finally as i gave in I'm released
i can see now the sadness on the walls
i can hear a constant beat that doesn't stall
the blood that was on the wall sets the place
and the screams where just that my cries of pain
and the constant thumbing was my hearts beat
that light was my just an illusion to fool me
that light was my hope to leave"

Its beautiful.

The title is very stong. And my attention was kept the whole time. Very well written.

That was really wonderful, i liked your rhyming...gooood

Dark
deep
sad
loved it
keep writing!!!