This poem was a lot better than the other one, I think. It flowed better and the storyline was once again beautiful. My favorite stanza was the 3rd one. The only part that stands out at me as "needs fixing" are the 2 lines

"This makes no sense
In the light of the sun"

It sounds like you just used in the light of the sun as a filler so it would rhyme. It's a slightly confusing word choice. I would suggest something more like:
I step out of the moment
To reflect on what I've done
This makes no sense
Why did you run?

or something like that. Just a suggestion.. <3