Hello.
I like the limited, yet visual use of words in your poem. The lines weren't long at all, yet you said everything you needed to say. Well Done.
Greta x

Beautiful. i really do like the choppy. i think that with an abstract peice, everyone can get a beauty and can find their own message....good job. <3

I saw the hidden message.
She broke your heart!
I'm sorry bud, u'll get through it!
It's really good!
5/5

Good poem. I like the way you used so few words yet you said so much. I like this poem. It's different than what people usually write. Very interesting. 5/5

This was pretty laconic but meaningful. every word has a lot of meaning and poetic imagery, and that is what i loved most in your way of writing in this poem.
the way your ideas dance around form is unusual and eye-catching, for example in these lines:
shattered in pieces
more leaks
it squeezes
triangle form

and in the end you tell us what is inside :
"twisted inside
that i can't hide"
- and both this form thing and inside thing tell us a lot about how you feel and somehow it made me feel quite the same while reading it.
you really did a great job.
5/5

I like that this poem is abstract, it made me look for a meaning beyond the words that were written on the page. The rhyming wasn't consistent but it didn't really matter because it read well anyway due the good flow.

Em xXx