SUN&RAIN

by Lizaveta   Feb 1, 2008


I could write a poem to the sun,
write, that your sight
Can only be compared with a ray of light
Summer day full of laughs and fun

Write, that you make me shine
That your love is like a sea when it's still
Like dew in the morning time
But it's not exactly what you make me feel

So i say that you're my thunderstorm
Raindrops genly run down my face
Make my heart beat, my mind is gone
When here in the rain we dance

I should have known that morning after rain is cold,
It's shame for me how now I miss the sun
It's shame for you you left me all alone
It's just in mist, all what it has become

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  • 16 years ago

    by Sora

    Wow this was deep. and beautiful i loved how you compared the suna dn the rain to the one you love. it was beautiful indeed. a wonderful write, and a fantastic flow. a lovely heartfelt poem. job well done. 5/5.

    -Ashlei.

  • 16 years ago

    by Beautiful Forever

    Very good poem, beautifully written! And the concept was very nice. Great write 5/5

  • 16 years ago

    by Jenni

    I really loved this poem. It was filled with so much emotion, and your choice of words was brilliant. I loved the metaphor, "So I say that you're my thunderstorm" that was my favorite line of the whole poem. [: Keep up the good work!

  • 16 years ago

    by Stephanie

    This was so beautiful. It truly was. :]

    "So i say that you're my thunderstorm
    Raindrops genly run down my face
    Make my heart beat, my mind is gone
    When here in the rain we dance"

    ^ I absolutely adore this stanza. The imagery in this stanza is outstanding. :]] It was so vivid, and eyecatching.

    Amazing job, m'dear. :] Overall: 5.5
    - Steph.

  • 16 years ago

    by StonedGooberz

    Haha i had to read this (hence thy name) it was wonderfully written i specailly like the stanze "So i say that you're my thunderstorm
    Raindrops genly run down my face
    Make my heart beat, my mind is gone
    When here in the rain we dance" good job 5/5

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