Angels and Demons

by Stephanie Naylor   Feb 1, 2008


Your are a beautiful shrine,
an angel sent from god

Your soft blonde hair,
your pale milky skin

The radiating smell
of a strong man

The overwhelming touch
that makes me melt

Then there is I
a demon sent from hell

My dirty black hair,
my filthy rough skin

The smell of rotting flesh,
the blood that lines my lips

Cower away from my touch
I know we will never be

I shall love you from afar
because a beauty such as you

Doesn't deserve
a disease like me

Copyright (c) Stephanie Naylor

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  • 16 years ago

    by RobinAnn13

    I definately love the last 2 lines. Very powerful. This poem was fairly short and simple but it says so much. I love the storyline. 5/5

  • 16 years ago

    by Spirit of the forest

    I'm a little of cynic when it comes to poetry, my earlier work is testement to this slight hypocrisy (as it's rather bad) but this poem has got me erked.
    I didn't find any of the imagery in there moving, or emotional, the broken stanzas of un-rhyming couplets added to the sense of emotion, but lexically it wasn't representative of anything emotional, but merely of self-loathing. Was this intended, "The smell of rotting flesh"
    The meaning behind it wasn't clear, being a dark poem, is it about the repentence of demons who look up to the angels above them and wish to touch soft skin? or is it your own dark feelings?
    I am really confused about this
    though using couplets without making them rhyme is a bold move... not a clever one... but a bold one all the same. 2/5
    I'm sorry that I'm being harsh

  • 16 years ago

    by Stephanie

    I love this. I truly do. The emotions were intense, they blew me away. The word choice was chosen perfectly, and overall, this poem was amazing m'dear.

    "Your soft blonde hair,
    your pale milky skin

    My dirty black hair,
    my filthy rough skin"

    ^ These two couplets were my favorites I have to say. The imagery in them was so vivid, they just stood out. :]] Beautiful job. Overall: 5.5

    -- Steph.

  • 16 years ago

    by JEFF

    I enjoyed it.

  • 16 years ago

    by XxToWriteLoveOnHerWristxX

    I like the way you use your words. even though they dont rhyme much they still work together to bring out the true melody in your poem. i also like the way you show the fact that the devil cant have her, but he watches from afar. its cute and inspiring love. great read 5/5 !props!