Oh my this was so sad. awwww!!!
only thought is to fix a mispelled word
"You soft blonde hair,"
it should be
"Your soft blonde hair,"
you just forgot the R. but it was a great write
5/5

It is really well worded and you used unique style. I really enjoy this one. Excellent poem and brilliantly written. I can relate to it line to line.

Your soft blonde hair,
your pale milky skin

That's my favorite stanza.
Well done. 5/5 from me!!!

Aww thats not a nice thing to say about your self this poem was very sad and cruel but i guess thats how it was suppose to be 5/5

Wow.. i like those thougths, so sweet and very inspiring! yeah is (YOUR SOFT BLONDE HAIR) hope u could change that then.. well still i enjoyed the messages coz it seems really full of sweet and fabulous words.. love it just keep on writing and keep it up ! 5/5

I like the way you use your words. even though they dont rhyme much they still work together to bring out the true melody in your poem. i also like the way you show the fact that the devil cant have her, but he watches from afar. its cute and inspiring love. great read 5/5 !props!

I enjoyed it.

I love this. I truly do. The emotions were intense, they blew me away. The word choice was chosen perfectly, and overall, this poem was amazing m'dear.

"Your soft blonde hair,
your pale milky skin

My dirty black hair,
my filthy rough skin"

^ These two couplets were my favorites I have to say. The imagery in them was so vivid, they just stood out. :]] Beautiful job. Overall: 5.5

-- Steph.

I'm a little of cynic when it comes to poetry, my earlier work is testement to this slight hypocrisy (as it's rather bad) but this poem has got me erked.
I didn't find any of the imagery in there moving, or emotional, the broken stanzas of un-rhyming couplets added to the sense of emotion, but lexically it wasn't representative of anything emotional, but merely of self-loathing. Was this intended, "The smell of rotting flesh"
The meaning behind it wasn't clear, being a dark poem, is it about the repentence of demons who look up to the angels above them and wish to touch soft skin? or is it your own dark feelings?
I am really confused about this
though using couplets without making them rhyme is a bold move... not a clever one... but a bold one all the same. 2/5
I'm sorry that I'm being harsh

I definately love the last 2 lines. Very powerful. This poem was fairly short and simple but it says so much. I love the storyline. 5/5