This was a very nice poem. The only advice I have for you is to not use the word "you" so much. In some of the lines you don't even need it to make the poem flow. The repetition of it actually throws off the flow. I also suggest capitalizing the single I in the first line; and add punctuation. After you complete your editing this will be great. I look forward to reading more of your work. Keep writing.

Letty