The double rhyme scheme is really good. It doesnt get funky like sometime it does.

That's a very good ending, though it's lines are a bit longer than the other ones in the poem. Um, the only suggestion I really have is to remove the word "hell" from your poem, because I feel a more poetic word could be used in its place but other than that, this was really good. The flow was good. The rhyme was superb!
*ME*

Favorite.

You are a remarkable writer, and the flow of the words and vivid images just spills off the paper! The emotion is beautiful :)

brilliant 10/5

I LOVED THIS!

the "I refuse to pinch this all away"
that was so breathtaking.
i understand it came from the whole "pinch me im dreaming thing"
and i thought you putting this line into it, was absolutely awesome.
very creative.
5/5

Beautiful! I just loved the ending because I love it when wonderful dreams become a beautiful reality. Nicely said. I do thing the flow was a bit rocky in the beginning but as the poem progressed, it became flawless. The emotions and images you described were ones I could relate with which made it even more enjoyable to read.

"I enjoy every minute in your presence
This is one hell of a dream
The moment becomes intense
The passion makes us scream "
^beautiful!!!

well done *5/5*

Wonderful and expressive of the feeling love brings

AWWW this is so sweet, i love it, the emotion is amazing... and the flow great as well...

I enjoy every minute in your presence
This is one hell of a dream
The moment becomes intense
The passion makes us scream

I LOVE THESE LINES... this right here truly set the poem in my opinion, very well written GREAT JOB... 5/5