Dreams Die Daily.

I think the first is better, although they're both great, i like how you say don't dream, dreams die

Wow, first of all this is truly a mind-blowing poem and rhythm that you created trough every line is so effective and intense.
Bravo, I read this like it is one poem with a powerful repetition in second stanza but if I have to chose one I think that second is better cause this lines:
-Don't dare
Don't dance
Don't dream --
are simply amazing cause they are simple but you still managed to made really powerful tone in them.
Very provoking poem, you did fantastic job with this piece, it posses amount of originality and it is truly creative. I enjoyed in this poem, very refreshing job!