by Jennifer RIP Lesthat Hayden Feb 3, 2008
category :
Life, society /
about society
It is true, there are people, that don't really care |
Wow I enjoyed this one thanks for your comment on "Wind beneath my wings" |
Hmm, this poem was written about a thought. It seems kinda vague. You were very descriptive in your writing about how you felt. But something feels like its missing. The ending was fabulous and I loved it. And the flow was good as well. But I have to give this a 4/5. |
by Marius Laun
Wow.......... THe only thing i could say as a word of improvement would be to add a little bit more on the topic and and another stanza or two. But your analysis of the world and it's ignorance to wrong doings is incredibly acurate. I'll spread word of this around, Everything was well written. |