Wow. That's amazing how you answered for both girl and boy. You are way more talented than me when it comes to love poems. I bet if you showed this to that special lady, she said yeah. lol Awesome job
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I LOVE IT!!! WOW OH WOW!!! I like the dialect, flow, and story line in this. I like how you both belong to another, but you desire to be with her. I love the flow and how polite, considerate and gentle you were in this piece. Very well written, just an amazing piece.

Wow. Very poetic. I loved the way it went from the girl refusing to lay with him to the sudden surrender in the last stanza. The repetition of the last line in each stanza adds to the beauty of the poem. Forbidden love doesn't always come out the way it's meant to in poems, but I think, in this case, it did. Nicely done. 5/5

Awww, very cute. Very sensual, and raw.