Comments : A DROP OF SUN. Memories

  • 16 years ago

    by Kate Hicks

    Very nicely put. I know this feeling well. 5/5

  • This is such a cute poem. The emotiom and feeling were so warm-hearted. Although, it does have some grammatical errors and in the first stanza, second line, I think there's a word missing. I don't know if it's just me, but I think so. Anyway, good poem though!

    .:CiNdY:.

  • 16 years ago

    by Lizaveta

    Cindy, thank you for these words!
    I know there might be some grammar mistakes coz English is not my first lang, so sorry for that:)))))))
    i'll try to find them)

  • 16 years ago

    by FlawlesslyTarnished

    A beautiful write. your descriptions were very well thought out and made this piece very well written. the flow was nice and I really liked the repition of the last line in all the stanzas. It really caught my attention. :] The ending wrapped it up nicely. 5/5. :]

  • 16 years ago

    by BlueEyedMystery

    This is a pretty common poem, but there was one part I liked in it. "A drop of sun falls into my soul" That part was unique. I think if you open your mind you could make this poem amazing. I know you can do it from that one line. Right now it's good, sweet, the kind of poem that makes you go "awww". If that's what you were going for great! It's really is a good peom.

    Keep writing!
    Cayce

  • 16 years ago

    by Blissful

    The imagery here was jus beautiful and it captivated me from beginning to end. I feel as if you can add a lil more to it to add some more meaning ful its great just the way it is. It was simple yet full of power. Well done *5/5*

  • 16 years ago

    by Chase

    Awwww!!!!!!! That's sad!! T^T!!! I enjoyed reading this poem, but it is very pretty!! Very emotionally intense when you state your love is no more....

  • 16 years ago

    by azii

    Nice. I like this one too. the line " A drop of sun falls into my soul ". it's really unique. i haven't heard any other line like this before and that's what makes this poem special. very often you see the one and same line in a lot of poems you read. nd i love the two last stanzas i duno why :D i guess it's cuz i can relate to them very well
    anyway good job keep it up

    take care

    5/5

  • 16 years ago

    by Jacqui Armstrong

    Love this poem, pretty descriptive and imaginative.
    well done and i can understand how ur feeling too!

    Love
    Jacs
    xxx

  • 16 years ago

    by Lemma

    Aww so sweet but so sad! I love the idea of a drp of sun falling into your soul, it's so lovely. The image of walking barefoot on sand is really strong too. Nice one, Em xXx

  • 16 years ago

    by StandStill

    Im sorry taht it's just a dream now. it is so beautiful, what you captured. very true. a drop of sun in my soul...

  • 16 years ago

    by ShawdowDancer

    I loved this poem so much you write so good

  • 16 years ago

    by Stephanie

    "A drop of sun falls into my soul"

    ^ I love this line! & I love how you repeated it at the end of each stanza. It added a little something extra to the poem. The flow was flawless, and the emotions were intense. Beautiful job! :} Overall: 5.5

    - Steph.

  • 16 years ago

    by Mike Martin

    This is very good. I like the feeling and the thoughts. I can def relate to it...good job....5/5....xoxo

  • 16 years ago

    by Sumit Ojha

    Nice poem... good work...
    anyway, what you mean with A drop of sun...

  • 16 years ago

    by Boy

    Its such a romantic poem....... and itssuch a unique idea.. a drop of sun in your soul.... i like the way you have expressed your words.... so touchy writing you have put here...

    i think you can write very well love poems... its such an amazing poem... and its so good. to who we love they are with us for stay forever...

    if you find that person then never leave us.. and hold his hand.. cuz that person is your evrything.. to who u love and specially who loves you..

    excelletn piece of work....
    i really appriciate your work.. its so good specially i like the words you have used in your words.. a perfect match of words according to your idea and title of the poem....

    you got 5