This is amazing, u serious, u think im good wen ur writing things like this !!!! this was genious (darkest ray of light)

The point, rhythm, rhyme were good. it was just the flow that didnt stay. but i still get confused on what each line is saying. idk. tweak them up the best you can. then maybe i can explain what i am trying to say. and its depth...not dept.

Well written. i can really relate to your words