by Dragon Slayer Feb 6, 2008
category :
Love, romance /
desired love
I will always be one step ahead of you, |
by .K.i.T.t.Y.
Hum. the flow isn't completely there, but the poem has its potential. explain more why youd be a step ahead. just reading the word it makes you sound to full of yourself. it makes me not like the narrator. show loving reasons youd be ahead. and if you want me to show you where the flow breaks, let me know. |