Wow that was...blunt.sweet.amazing

This has a good flow. i agree with pookiengurgi. it is blunt. lol. i like it tho

You are so good at expressing how it is...this is amazing....dont ever give up writing......great

I can tell by all of your poetry that you have a really good heart. I have no respect for anyone who dares break it.

I have a few suggestions for the poem though, because some places were a little rocky.

"Dying to take in our hearts
A love that is the truth"

For the second line, I think that
"A love that is true"
sounds much better.
Just a suggestion. Everyone will read this differently, but for me, the way it is now, the second line knocks off the flow.

"I can't tell you yes &
I can't tell you no
I can't tell you to stay &
I can't tell you to go"

I think you should take out the "&'s"
You need to match it with the other stanza that is like this. The "&'s" also knock off the flow.

"I just want to feel your love
At this moment in time

I just want to free the thoughts
In my often enslaved mind"

You are rhyming lines 2 & 4 of this [if you were looking at it as a stanza] and the last line has more syllables than the one it is rhyming with, so again, flow of it is rocky. I think if you took out "often" it would work.
Again, just a suggestion.

Overall, I like the storyline to this. You can't do anything but love the other person. I think it is sweet.
And for that, I gave it a 5/5.

~Lace