Hello i am new to all this but have written these poems from the heart.....I hope you like them and will post a critique for me to read, i would really like to know what you think ...and would appreciate any help offered so that i can improve my work thanks for visiting and would you please take the trouble to vote for my poems as then i can get an idea of how good or bad you think they are... thanks.... |
Oh why am i this sad case,
who sits here every day...
I saw your lovely picture,
it truly blew my mind...
Twas nine at night,
just four her time...
My love, just thought i'd tell,
Of how i feel about you...
sadness overcomes me...
I say this so it can be
this girl she just cant see...
Sadness all around me
my mind is all consumed...