Peace be upon you All ,my dears
firstly before i start my topic ,i'd like to express my utter happiness and great pleasure to be a member of this beneficial site.
also i must not hide my admiration and appreciation to the way the topics have been discussed here ! I"m a regular reader(although i don't answer or comment) but i do read each single topic here in order to learn and benefit ,and thank you all for being serious ,honest,and very wise/
well. i have just a little simple request(I wish i don't bother you with it) ,which is that i have lately written a quote ,and it has been rated as Bad (1),
i'll write down the quote here and what i meant by it ,and i wish if you kindly tell me your opinions about it(whether good or bad).and if bad ,Why is it bad ?
and don't worry i will thankfully welcome the critique and accept it ..
the quote is..
your love is bitter ,but i like its taste !!
i mean by bitterness of love here (tears.longing.missing,jealousy) all of these things are included with love.
the tears of yearning ,the moan of longing,the state of missing ,and fire of jealousy are sensations you wouldn't feel if you were not in a state of love !
and according to a personal experience ,i can tell that i've been through these sensations ,i've tasted them all ,but my love for that person had never decreased !
so I'm smiply saying to her here ,,
your love is bitter ,but i like its taste!
yes i liked its bitterness coz i've got used to it ,and because i loved you for who you are !
should I change my words into another words that give a better meaning ?
or was the wording of quote not proper !
maybe the description wasn't suitable?
( till very moment i think that there's nothing wrong with my quote) ,but i'm not a critic nor even an expert poet to be confident about what i wrote ,and this is why I'm seeking your comments and critiques..
i'm All ears , just be as free as you can .
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