Song Title Contest With A Difference

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Dun dun dun! The results!!!

I'd just like to say, thank you to ALL who took part, this has been a lot of fun to host and incredibly hard to judge! I wanted all the poems to win! But there has to be placings, and these are...

FIRST PLACE: MYxWORDSxMYxSOUL (Teenage Romance) - Endlessly
SECOND PLACE: Dollwithafrown - City Of Delusion
THIRD PLACE: Dark Delirium - Hysteria

And an HONOURABLE MENTION goes to: tetrisxxkrista (LifesALovePoem) - Starlight

Well done everybody, PM me your poems you want commenting! I will try to comment on these soon, but its exam season!!

PRIZES:
1st place - 7 in depth comments and a place on my favourites list.
2nd place - 5 in depth comments
3rd place - 3 in depth comments
Honourable mention - 1 in depth comment

Muscle Museum & Hysteria

Could I please have "Hate This and I'll Love You" and "City of Delusion"?

Thanks. ^__^

Unintended please. By the way love the idea for a contest. I for one love muse so... yeah.

Unintended. I'm a girl but I made the poem seem from the point of view of a guy since the song is.

Wait while I regain my liveliness
Because I think we can be more then this
Who would have thought that while I was healing
You'd come along and give me back these feelings
You could be my unintended love
The one I'm always thinking of
You could be my unintended cure
Of the things done to me by her
You could be the reason I live on
Now that my old life is dead and gone
You could be the one who listens to me
My heart is locked up, you could be the key
You could be my unintended queen
We could feel so secure and serene
You could be my unintended love
The one I'm always thinking of

Also please reserve endlessly.

~KM~

Endlessly.

Out of my control, the way I love you
Doesn't matter what you say or do
I'll love you forever, endlessly
You don't know everything about me
but that doesn't make me less inclined
To try to keep you in my heart, on my mind
I promise I will answer your every call
I'll always catch you if you should fall
For the life of me I couldn't let you go
How much I love you, you'll never really know
Endlessly, I'll stay by you
Endlessly, I'll help you get through
I would walk thousands of miles
Just to see one of your loving smiles
I won't ever let you down
I'll hold you up even if it means I drown
Endlessly, I'll stay by you
Endlessly, I'll help you get through
Endlessly, yes endlessly, I'll love you

~KM~

"Unintended". :D

Note: The way I understood the song was.. the 'unintended' love, must have been something he didn't expect, because the definition of "unintended" is "results were not planned to happen, although they happened", so I kind of wrote it like that-ish. :P Also, not sure if this is considered any kind of 'form', because while some forms may include something like this, most require more; the last stanza is the first stanza, but the lines are opposite. :)

Darling, don't fret; for I will be on my way soon,
I'm picking up the pieces of my life before you.
Wait for me to hop on the train that'll take me,
to the love I never expected, my unintended.

So much is shattered on her hardwood floor,
I left to retrieve it all for you, my unintended.
You won't get the fractured pieces of my past,
I'm putting them together so I can be whole.

Don't lose faith in me, just believe, my unintended,
that I will be by your side as soon as possible.
You won't get a portion; you'll get one-hundred percent,
but I need to glue the pieces of my past together.

The love I never expected, my unintended,
wait for me to hop on the train back to you.
I'm picking up the pieces of my life before you,
darling, don't fret; for I will be on my way soon.

Briana Coulter
03.09.09

Take a bow, please

Starlight please.

Starlight

Was it all worth it,
the pain and trials?
Never been rejected,
until I met you.

I'm not letting go,
I refuse to drop you.
You're staying in minds,
hopes and expectations.

Feel your warm skin,
wrapped around my own.
The seas taking me out,
boats sinking beneath me.

Black holes and revelations,
soaring through dismal space.
Emptiness and quiet despair,
keep on wishing for you.

Hate This and I'll Love You
by dollwithafrown

Broken record, hear it play,
Set me up for another shattered day.
Eyes heavy, stones line each lash,
Lay me down and avoid the crash.

Wave your hand, set off and go,
The end is something you need to know.
You can't stick me in your bubble cage
And hope love grows with passing age.

Ride with the shore, slip off to sea,
No longer your lover; no longer me.
Break the relationship, I no longer care
As I walk away, death scenting the air.

City of Delusion
by dollwithafrown

Coat me with your lies,
Feeding words into my soul,
But listen clearly as I say:
The truth does not grow old.
[your city of delusion
will not beat me
my heart and my own eyes
are what i use to see]

Rest your arms, empty your mind;
A need for belief, so very unkind.
Our rights: pushed into the ground;
Slapped for making a thread of sound.
[your city of delusion
will not beat me
my heart and my own eyes
are what i use to see]

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The lyrics to this song can be rather confusing, so I'm not altogether sure on whether or not my interpretation was correct. However, I got the feeling that the song was taking a political and even possibly a religious standpoint, and therefore I went with that theme.

Sober, Please and thanx

Sober
By: Twisted Heart

The lights are hot above me
The liquor flows like streams
There's music to intoxicate
Fills me full of dreams
I've left my heart upon the shelf
No pain with me tonight
I'll sip another slow gin fizz
Until I'm feeling light
The dancing sways me slower
As arms reach out to me
Another drink I'm almost there
Thoughts tempered to be free
My eyes are getting heavy
I feel I've reached my peak
But another drink's waiting
To come and rescue me
Now thoughts of you are dying
My memory unclear
Was it only yesterday
When you left me here
Yes, one more drink should do it
A heartache to get over
Drinks cure the pain I feel tonight
But tomorrow...

I will be sober

Can I reserve:

Starlight,
City of Delusion

Please and thanks :)

Hysteria & Endlessly

Sorry, I have to unreserve my titles, I won't be able to write those in time.

NyellMoonlight, that's absolutely fine :)

Keep up the stuff guys! This is going to be hard to judge!

Take A Bow

Guess you never figured that I'd find out
About the countless times you strayed
Leaving me with only tears for comfort
Feeling so lonely hurt and betrayed

Should have won a thousnad oscars
For everything you said was just an act
But you're going to have a surprise
If you think I'll lower myself and react

Managed to hide it for so long
Should have realized when we grew apart
Constant occurence of tears on my face
Became your favourite form of art

Only, refuse to cry for you any longer
Deserve better, know this without a doubt
So why don't you do us both a favour
Find another to believe your lies and get out

Used to think we'd always be together
You were the only one that I desired
Now your fantasy world has crashed down
Been discovered you're just a cheat and liar

For those still reserved, you have two weeks left, which is plenty enough time!

And for any one that wants to reserve, you still have time :)

Hysteria

Writhing with desire,
deriding control.
Night and day,
makes no difference.
Losing.
Blase.

Tempting risks,
with a mindless oddity.
Taking it down,
with my desperation.
Threatened.
Exasperated.

It binds me,
tight and illusive.
Cruel screams,
tearing me out.
Bounded.
Escaped.

Eyes of madness,
deplores insomnia.
Feeding a mania,
I will not sleep.
Fluent.
Refused.

Craving for a requital to salvage my selfish prurience,
longing for absolute victory in a myriad of dementia.
I have caved in.
Hysteria.

2 days left people!! I might not officially close on Wednesday, leaving people time to finish poems, but it will be closed by the weekend, so be warned!

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2 DAYS! XD

Endlessly

Tie your dreams with me,
deplore my hope.
Sweet memories,
deficit infinity.
Abhorred.
Depleted.

Your silence,
smothered me.
Fervid moments,
idled with you.
Hectic.
Suffocated.

Cherish these,
it's not forever.
Sacrificing,
my life for yours.
Treasured.
Waived.

Time withers,
but I linger.
I shall not surrender,
wait enduringly.
Constricted.
Abided.

No words could decipher the intense mortality of my affections,
I have kept this within the iris of my misanthropic secrecy.
I will remain.
Endlessly.

CLOSED!!

If you haven't posted your poem yet, sorry but I'm judging now, no late entries accepted.

Results up some time next week!

Dun dun dun! The results!!!

I'd just like to say, thank you to ALL who took part, this has been a lot of fun to host and incredibly hard to judge! I wanted all the poems to win! But there has to be placings, and these are...

FIRST PLACE: MYxWORDSxMYxSOUL (Teenage Romance) - Endlessly
SECOND PLACE: Dollwithafrown - City Of Delusion
THIRD PLACE: Dark Delirium - Hysteria

And an HONOURABLE MENTION goes to: tetrisxxkrista (LifesALovePoem) - Starlight

Well done everybody, PM me your poems you want commenting! I will try to comment soon, but its exam season!! :D

Yay thanks for the honorable mention! That's better than nothing at all.
If you could comment Landlocked, that'd be great.
Thanks again!

Ooh, I'm a tad bit late and only just saw that you placed me second. Thank you so much! :)

Congrats to everybody else, too.

I will PM you my poems shortly.