My Work in progress [1 for 2]

``So, im asking you to read my newest poem [without a real title] labeled as "work in progress".
-------it isnt REALLY explicit. it doesn't have any REAL swear words, just the slang for prostitute, and some other words i think they dont see appropriate
``If you would please read and give some advice onto what i could add, take away or improve on HERE in this thread that would be wonderful.

``Advice must be longer than 4 sentences.

``In return i will RRC 2 poems of your choice.
``````````Please PM me (after you've read and commented the poem) with the 2 poems you wish for me to RRC.

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```Please don't comment on here "i'll do this!" or "ill get right on this!"
```````` I would like to just copy the whole thread and use it to work on my poem so extra clutter is unnecessary.

in summary-
read my latest,
comment about it here,
pm me with 2 poems you want RRC'd
Fin!

Thank you!!

Just.. letting people know that i'm keeping this open for awhile, i may not RRC you right away but i'll do it!

I may even add another if i like your work!

[Please?]