NEED HELP 1 for 3!

I wrote a poem, and I have been having some trouble with it. I am not completely happy with it as a whole and wouldn't mind some helpful advice. If anyone has some better wording idea it would be greatly apprecitated

I will gladly return the favor!

It is called This is MY vision.

Thank you to everyone in advance who can help

Sure id be happy to help

Done. Good write.

Could you please do:

"This Love Journey"
"All I Feel"
"10:58 (Drowning)"

Thank you in advance!

Done can u do
Alison part 1
Alison part 2
Alison part 3 finale

thank u

Done

All Of Me
Alice(Part One)
War(Double Butterfly Oddquain and Rictameter)

Please and thank you
Nik