Help please

Havent been on in a long time since '07 didnt have online...Please read some of my poems I have to edit one of my new ones but I posted 2 new but please look at whatever you can and comment b/c i can use help an advice on it....I will do the same back i work a lot so it may not be rite away but i will next time im online....please and thank you!!! I would reallly appreciate it i need it rite now b/c im going through some hard times please and thanx Ill do the same for you thats a promise!!!