Congratulations May 24th Winners

Congratulations to the winners!

Remember to support your fellow poets. Senior members may nominate up to 3 poems per week.

Lacustrine [Rondeau]

by Mera Luna

Past windswept charm, a widow dyes
waterside-shades among demise
of opaque gown and sprouted lace,
beneath texture, her fingers chase
... quivering the lake as she sighs.

Draperies outshine like sunrise,
vermillion dust soon to arise
and chestnut trees her finest grace
... past windswept charm.

Shelving across the mushroom's skies,
clouds of colour sadly devise
an artwork rippled like the face
of crescent moon's latest disgrace.
Thenceforth her grey wonders surmise
... past windswept charm.

The Rondeau is a French form of 15 lines in 3 stanzas: quintet, quatrain and sestet. 13 of the lines are of 8 syllables, and 2 of the lines are a refrain of 4 syllables. The rhyme scheme is aabba aabR aabbaR. For added difficulty, use the first half of the first line for the repeating refrain.

^Great way to start out and grab the readers attention. Beautiful imagery that paints a picture of the definition of the title. That is clever as well as the word choice. The rhyming isn't forced, you adhered to the rules of the form. Good use of enjambment. Excellent job! It is also nice that you added a description of the form at the end for those who aren't familiar with it.

Corner of the Moonlight [Verso Blanco]

by Venia

In the heart of
Indelible hues, breathe
memory-clad promises
upon chains. Forevers and evers
lay dormant in the corner of the moonlight
just to wake by sunrise, 'neath the warmth of your faithfulness

Syllable count is 4, 6, 7, 9, 11, 14

^This is a beautifully penned short but very very sweet piece. Good imagery and word choice. Good use of enjambment and metaphors!

The Fractured Song of a Songbird

by Aspiring To Inspire

A melody so beautiful stings
the night air, swirling prismatic
colors of flowery elegance,

a whirlwind affliction to my
eyes, which see with
childish impotency.

The branch upon which
the songbird whistled
flexed in the spiraling winds

casting feathers and a
fluttering of wings into
the peaceful air.

With curled fingers,
the song came to an abrupt
end- the final note undefinable.

I strangled the harmonious
sound from within her throat
in envy of the beauteous song.

^Nice word choice. This is a unique piece with a surprise ending. It keeps the reader's attention.

Congratulations to the 3 winners!!

Congrats to all three, I really enjoyed each piece :]

Congrats to the winners :)

Congrats!!!

Congrats winners!
Thanks for posting the poems Rachel

Congratulation to the three of you. You truly deserve it. :]

Congrats to all three winners ... very deserving.

Thanks Rachel for posting the poems along with your comments. Excellent idea !!!!!!

Congrats. Nice work to all.