I just need some output

.... AND I WILL RETURN THE FAVOR.
poem about death..not so much.

I kind of took a detour on my style of writing and I wrote something a little odd. Some feed back would be cool, like does it suck? Does it need more explaination? More feeling? Grammar? Yanno, the works :). Be honest, I'd prefer your brutal constructive honesty as opposed to " OK KOOL IT WAS AWSOME" ( but its cool if you want to =])

The name of the poem I wrote is called A PERFECT NIGHT TO DIE.

or, to make this easier

http://www.poems-and-quotes.com/sad/poems.php?id=1155663

If you like, message me or comment the name of the poem(s) of yours that you would like me to read rate and comment.

thank you for your time!