Weekly Contest Winners....May 16th

Congratulations to all our winners and honorable mentions and thank you to our judges.

Lazy Daisy by Yakzzz

This was a clever piece. the idea of writing a poem based on words you've forgotten is an interesting concept, not sure if I've seen it done before and if so, rarely. Too often do thoughts cross our minds and yet we don't move to write them down and they become lost, no matter how many times you try and get those words to come back to you, you never can, because they will never be written the same. I enjoyed the title, it was lovely imagery. When I think of a daisy I had never put lazy to them but now that I've read your title they do seem quite lazy in the way that they droop. What I loved about this poem was the simplicity, I felt you were talking straight to me. The tone was reminiscent and regretful but still elegant none the less. The only suggestion I make is that in the last line of the second stanza I didn't feel 'I said' was necessary. However this poem was a lovely read.
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My Homeland by The Poetess

"A sad story that happens to be true for so many nations and I can only hope that things will get better as time progresses. This writer is expressing her heart and love for her country but stands dumb struck at how it has fallen. The words and emotions bring out a powerful message of love and devotion."

I've read this poem many times and every time it packs such an impact and that's why I couldn't help but vote for it. The emotion behind this poem was really able to move me. I felt the anger and yet I was overwhelmed by the sadness, such a combination of feelings and yet I still felt the honor and love for the homeland you speak of. You created a powerful message over the atmosphere and I believe that was from your raw honesty, it's something that isn't sugarcoated and we need to see more of this in poetry and writing in general actually. You could tell that this was something that effects you deeply on many levels and therefore you were able to create more of an understanding for your audience who don't witness things such as you do, or who don't have such a strong understanding. I was captured by the ending, it was almost like a little slap in the face for the reader, a wake up call. A poem filled with many emotions and a pleasure to read.

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Metaphorical Murder by Brillant aka Ms SunShine

Metaphors were very clear and the message of the poem was kept lucid with its many different ideas and never once did a stanza seem vague. Many emotions were poured into this poem and I am really taken away with the power of each stanza how you can feel the writers heart with each stanza as their beats."

Quite a fan of this piece, right from the fantastic first line. This enthusiastic author has a sweet tendency to be excessive with her words and metaphors and general poetic fever. This style of poem is where those things were welcomed, and the context lent itself well to exaggeration- it was smooth and classy and the many starring metaphors were piercingly fitting, letting the inherently bitter emotion seep effortlessly into the reader's pores. Murderously executed indeed.

The poem was deep and thought provoking. I found it to be full of mystery, I kept wondering to myself who it was the writer speaks of. You gave no evidence to who it was from my perspective and I began to wander if it was on a larger scale, perhaps you were speaking to many people not just a single person. While this poem seemed to be fueled by anger, I'd like to say it was fueled by passion because your words were indeed passionate and ablaze. Intense word choice but I was more interested in your imagery created within second and third stanza. The comparison of who you speak of against such powerful images were intriguing to my sense. A dying light was clever, it gave me an image of a dying sun fading. The third stanza was filled with interesting description. The only thing I didn't enjoy about the third stanza was the sudden rhyme, I know you rhymed 'light' with 'white' previously but it wasn't as noticeable. A strong poem.
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Honorable Mentions

Stunned by Courageous Dreamer

"Vivid with a thought provoking metaphor that paints a canvass with so few words, portraying shock at realizing a sad truth that many people can relate to. The title describes the finishing feeling very well and that was creative in itself."

In Mourning #2 by Thomas

Again, this young author has written an effective poem about age and aging. What an imagination. A regular, everyday image of a child on an escalator can bring forth so much. It was a little bit of a forced metaphor, but the writing style was so quiet and resigned that it was quite lovely. The last stanza was made more poignant in its disparity.

Deep Blue--Haiku by Acoustic Odyssey

Was really hard to chose my 4-pointer this week, but I'll give to this haiku. I'm a fan of any haiku that does not merely describe, but conveys another message (usually a very human one) with it. This one did just that. The fact that I've been watching Attenborough's marvellous The Blue Planet may have influenced my decision somewhat, haha. Well done, a good little piece.

Salamanders by Karla

Safe in Sensuality by Britt

Salute, Mother by The Poetess

Congrats all!

Congratulations to all.

Congratulations to all winners and HMs.
Thanks, Judges

1st of all, ongratulatiocns for the H'ms and for both the winners, well deserved,
and seriously am over whelmed by the judges comments and am not sure if I deserved these precious and very kind words.

thanks a lot!

Congrats winners and Hm's :)

Yep, all 4 mods have access to the joint mod account and it's working out beautifully.

Thank you for posting this, Anna :) One comment... you left out the points the judges gave, which we have been including. I can add them in later after my final exam.

Anna and I will be taking turns posting the weekly results from now on because it's been difficult for me to do with school. My last class is tomorrow.

Congratulations everyone! Excellent writes! I am very happy with the winners this week (as always).

P.S. Also the comments for the HM's need to be posted.

*Ok I'm off to study.

Congrats to all three winners, lovely reads & Congrats to the Hm's!

Thanks Anna for posting.